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  1. MashedPotatoes

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    He is a boy and yet he is also a fish

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    It seems like wannabe managakas only take aesthetic inspiration from manga and get their story writing skills from crappy light novels, anime (note that these are both different mediums so they learn nothing about how to pace a comic) or their asses.
    Also they don't account for the fact that Japanese can translate to English super stiffly and awkwardly when they try and ape the writing style.
     
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  2. PervyIdiot

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    All I'm getting from this chapter is that Joseco doesn't have any older siblings. Younger kids usually get held to the lofty expectations set by older siblings. And having Kessah struggle to live up to the standard set by her legendary sister would make for interesting dynamic tension. But no, everyone is just going to sexually harass her or worship her.
     
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    when does he draw the smut, that's all it's good for
     
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    His smut isn't that great either.
     
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    It's got more than this nothing shit we've got here
     
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    Ah shit, they pulled the bait and switch on us. Does this mean Joseco is still lurking this thread?
     
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    Joseco is clearly the type to Google himself (it takes one to know one) so I'm not surprised he'd find this thread. And there's lots of reasons for him to lurk, from hateful curiousity to an honest desire to improve his comic.

    Of course, the fact he's ripping our fucking ideas without so much as listing us as beta readers is bullshit. At least credit people you get your ideas from.
     
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    Hey, John. Maybe giver her an expression other than 'scared maiden'.
    The fuck is that perspective in that third to last panel too.
     
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    There is a page missing right? Is it weird to anyone else that it went from "Damn that bitch can run 10 laps, etc. etc." to "You can't even finish your laps!" I feel like JJ cut out some important context here...
    hunterwolfguy.
    i spent too much time on this
     
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  10. Maria M

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    I guess we are supposed to take that she started off fast, didnt pace herself and flustered out after how ever many laps were required??
     
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    How's this guy gonna take forever and three days to shit out panels and panels and panels about their training (foregoing the training montage) then suddenly go " eh, let them figure out this actually important detail"
    Lazy fucking writing.
     
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    New Page. Kesha doesn't seem to do so well in her first day of training but finds the strength to push on nevertheless.
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    Haha lol she had five laps left to go which makes fifteen laps, concidence??? Also, not drawing the background by filling up the space with panels filled with words and whitespace. Did Kessa break her neck in the first panel again or am i just being hypercritical?
     
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    lol
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    How much you wanna bet she makes it by the skin on her teeth and the others celebrate her except for that one 'jerk', increasing the sexual tension. That or everybody hates her making her 'struggle' more intense.
     
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    You could have a whole fighter subgroup with animals like horses and cows.

    ... Really, anything that doesn't look like yet another wolf.
     
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    I wanna say she is going to have a bestiality gangbang with all her other running mates.
     
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    Hunters of Salamanstra sealed chapter: "Special EXXXertion training! Kessah needs to learn how to pace herself. Can the boys in her training group help her out? Features teamwork, eighties music, and an important reminder to keep up that fluid intake! Don't get dehydrated out there, soldier!"
     
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    I guess she just ran all day. Like an idiot.
    What happened to all the sweat on the front of her shirt?
     
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    "I'm just gonna lay here if you don't mind"

    If I were paying for this shit I damn well would mind with all the fucking nothing still happening with every goddamn page that gets released. Why does all this dribble get multiple pages and chapters but actual fights/good shit are resolved in, like, 1-3? What are his editors even doing? Did they even try for a bit and JJ just doesn't want to muddle his "artistic vision/integrity" or do they actually think this is good?

    I also like how he sticks his signature on every goddamn page for whatever reason
     
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    This chapter is so far actually going a lot better than I was expecting it to. I was expecting him to spend forever and ever on the training bullshit, but it was just a couple pages.
    I think he might actually be attempting to condense his comic? Either way, I consider this a promising step in the right direction. Now he just needs to figure out when and where he can clip shit short, and when and where he can linger.
     
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    I just woke up and I had a dream about that one being the final page of the entire comic.
    I had to check this thread to make sure if it was a dream or not. It felt just so real.
     
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    Well he's 'condensing' in all of the wrong places.
    It would have been better for that training montage or a few more panels/ pages of training then cut to the next day with a mention of her her 'just laying around' the previous night or whatever 'sooper important dialoog' I feel like is about to happen; like she reflects on it the next day.
    Not a few panels of training then a few panels of feewings and dialogue.
     
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    I predict the ending: This is all a dream and her mother/sister/aunt is telling her what a great humper....hunter shes gonna be cuz she da white wulf sista of sand-da-bar-land.
     
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    Despite all of her trials and hurdlesshe surpasses her brother and is Insta loved by all
     
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    She really ought not to wear dangling jewelry while working out.
     
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    Of course something is going to go different right on the second day (maybe). I would've hoped we'd get a "X week(s) later" and she's still kinda shit

    >maybe I just can't be pleased, but at least the whole page wasn't taken by Kessah going to sleep and it was half-and-half with another point in time so points there
     
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    That bear chick's pose is really stiff in that page there where Canae comes in. Just realized that. Who just sits and reads like that. Also, BearGirl has a pretty fucking bulbous head judging by where her ears are.
    How is Canae not suffocating btw.
    Again with the really stiff speed-walking pose when she's supposed to be running as fast as she can. Somebody get this guy some life study classes or something, shit.
    And who calls somebody a 'moron' for being physically incapable??? Seems like a really weird choice of words.

    Props for not giving her opai tiddies tho.
     
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  28. Maria M

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    he needs google.
     
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    It's sort of funny how weebs pick and chose what elements they pick up from manga/anime. Seems it's never really the good shit like the foundations.
     
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    I wonder if now it'll finally be explained why the guilds exist at all?
     
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