A monologue I'm working on for a story I'm thinking of doing.

Discussion in 'Your Shitty Projects' started by Baya Rae 4900, Jul 21, 2011.

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Is it gewd?

  1. Only you could write something like this. You wonderful, brilliant bastard.

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  2. Only you could write something like this. You callous, demented bastard.

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  1. Baya Rae 4900

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    What do you think? Is it captivating?
     
  2. Missingno

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    It would be nice if I knew the whole plot of the story and who this guy is.

    Other than that it looks pretty solid. Just fix the second sentence, it's unnecessarily long, maybe "We live, fight and die for things we don't believe in as much as we do so for things we do believe in"
     
  3. Doakes

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    Snorlax are you trying to be Ayn Rand again?
     
  4. Baya Rae 4900

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    Why would anybody want to be Ayn Rand?
     
  5. Zaichata

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    Here for the "Intellectual Debates"

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    Why be such a selfish bastard?
     
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    Seriously, what the fuck is Ayn Rand? What the hell is the book about? Is it just loads of undersea retards going "HURP FUCK A DURP PHILOSOPHY" or is there an actual plot?
     
  7. faggotmaximum

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    were the strong homosexual undertones intentional?
     
  8. Baya Rae 4900

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    I honestly can't remember. I should probably start writing shit down instead of relying on my long term memory. Which isn't so great.
     
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    It's like it wishes it was edgy, but it isn't.
    A far better story would be one where this guy goes back in time to stop himself from being raped, only to discover he rapes himself.
     
  10. David1544

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    also when the guy egaculates he releases an arrow at light speed from his anus
     
  11. Moscow

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    Errm, if I'm honest it didn't really speak to me.
     
  12. Baya Rae 4900

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    I know I've read that story some place before...